studio corporate shoot

for this shoot i was hoping to try to create an interesting lighting setup, with the use of 2 soft boxes and a back light

a basic plain black back ground

here is this interesting style i was going for, iv tried doing this before but i never have been successful.

i think this lighting scheme is close to what i was hoping to achieve, but if the lights are more directed to the sides of the subject instead of the front

as you can see its horrible. all the lighting is is just flat, he isnt separated from the back ground, their is that massive horrible black shadow on his forehead. after looking more closely at the image i was hoping to get, i notices all the different light scenario the photographer used

 here is the lighting scheme i came up with to create close to what i was hoping for